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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages.

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The popularity
 of social media has increased in recent year among all age groups, especially among teenagers. It has a lot to offer
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 as meeting new people, faster ways of sharing
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 and for entertainment purpose. On the flips side there is a risk involved in sharing data on social media which can be misused. I am of the opinion that, it's advantages outweigh disadvantages because of
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 security. I will discuss both the views of the topic.
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 with, social media website like Facebook and Twitter have opened doors for meeting new people and sharing
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 across the world.
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 has a positive impact on the society because finding like minded people and exchanging
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 has always been a challenge.
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, entertainment has been the most popular activity on social media among all age groups, apart from that access to flash news and spreading awareness among people is faster and reliable with the help digital media.
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, in India social media played a vital role in saving thousands of lives by spreading
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 to thousands of people during the cyclone.
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, there is a risk involved in sharing personal data on the internet because people can access and misuse the
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 in spreading false news and creating fake documents.
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 to that, blackmailing and following people
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are
 one of the most common
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activities
. In recent years awareness in securing
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 and maintaining privacy has been a top priority in social media with the help of
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 security. To illustrate, a teenager attempted suicide due to
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falsification
 spreading of
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 and photographs of him on social media. In conclusion, no doubt social media has more advantages and opened several ways of accessing
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 and connecting with new people, in spite of the risk involved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social media platforms
  • Connectivity
  • Self-expression
  • Creativity
  • Global communication
  • Instantaneous communication
  • Personal growth
  • Career advancement
  • Privacy concerns
  • Identity theft
  • Cyberbullying
  • Addiction
  • Productivity
  • Misinformation
  • Crisis
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