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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages.

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Popularity
Suggestion
The popularity
 of social media has increased in recent year among all age groups, especially among teenagers. It has a lot to offer
such
 as meeting new people, faster ways of sharing
information
 and for entertainment purpose. On the flips side there is a risk involved in sharing data on social media which can be misused. I am of the opinion that, it's advantages outweigh disadvantages because of
information
 security. I will discuss both the views of the topic.
To begin
 with, social media website like Facebook and Twitter have opened doors for meeting new people and sharing
information
 across the world.
This
 has a positive impact on the society because finding like minded people and exchanging
information
 has always been a challenge.
Moreover
, entertainment has been the most popular activity on social media among all age groups, apart from that access to flash news and spreading awareness among people is faster and reliable with the help digital media.
For instance
, in India social media played a vital role in saving thousands of lives by spreading
information
 to thousands of people during the cyclone.
However
, there is a risk involved in sharing personal data on the internet because people can access and misuse the
information
 in spreading false news and creating fake documents.
In addition
 to that, blackmailing and following people
is
Suggestion
are
 one of the most common
activity
Suggestion
activities
. In recent years awareness in securing
information
 and maintaining privacy has been a top priority in social media with the help of
information
 security. To illustrate, a teenager attempted suicide due to
false
Suggestion
falsification
 spreading of
information
 and photographs of him on social media. In conclusion, no doubt social media has more advantages and opened several ways of accessing
information
 and connecting with new people, in spite of the risk involved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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