Now a days most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. What are the main causes situation? Suggest some possible solutions.

The upper age limit of human beings has been increased due to advancements in medical science and technology. So people are able to extend the life span with the help of breakthrough medicines, fighting even chronic diseases.
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, current generation people are not stronger, muscular like the previous generation and it is due to changing lifestyles, where physical
activties
any specific behavior
activities
are performed by machineries. Another important factor is
food
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quality which has been compromised and lacks nutrient values, than it was in the past. . In
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essay some fundamental factors making people unhealthy and feasible solutions for the same will be discussed. Machineries and devices are everywhere and are stopping both women and men doing physical activities and
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, energy consumed by eating would stay as fat in
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body
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the body
as it is not converted into energy. People become addicted to using some automated
appliances preventing
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appliances, preventing
them from active life and
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results
into
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in
unhealthy and weaker. So it is
best
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better
to do the work rather than relying on some sort of
techonolgical
based in scientific and industrial progress
technological
device which aided our grandparents to maintain the
health
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.
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instance people
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instance, people
can commute to
office
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the office
for
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to
work regularly using bicycle or by walking than using
automoiles
a motor vehicle with four wheels; usually propelled by an internal combustion engine
automobiles
for shorter distances.
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cycling increases metabolism rate in the
body
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which burns unwanted calories in the
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body
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body, thus
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maintains the
body
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physique as well as increases the wellness of heart. Another key factor
detrimining
having the power or quality of deciding
determining
the
health
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of individuals is
food
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and it is by which everyone gains the required energy on
day
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a day
to day basis.
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Therefore, the
quality of
food
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consumed, determines the wellness of the consumers and it depends largely on the manufacturing method used. Previously farming was largely based on organic fertilizers which needed no hazardous chemical for both fertilisation and pest control activities.
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However current
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However, current
agriculturers
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uses
artiticial
contrived by art rather than nature
artificial
and poisonous chemicals for improving the yields as well to protect the crops from insect attacks.
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addition genetically
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addition, genetically
mofidied
changed in form or character
modified
foods with attractive appearance and increased shelf life have replaced the organically cultivated crops in the kitchens of many
households
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Households
globally. But recent researches have shown that genetically modified
foods
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food
has less nutrient
contents
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content
than the organic
food
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items and
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awarenss
having knowledge of
awareness
has to be
spreaded
distribute or disperse widely
spread
across.
Goverments
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Governments
has
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have
to promote and support organic farmers by providing
subsidaries
a grant paid by a government to an enterprise that benefits the public
subsidies
subsidiaries
for farming equipments and financial aids during droughts and floods. So by encouraging organic and traditional
food
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production technologies quality of
food
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can be maintained as well the people feed on it. In summary, laziness due to invasion of mechanical devices in everyday activities can worsen the
health
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severly
to a severe or serious degree
severely
and so people should
invlove
connect closely and often incriminatingly
involve
in physically demanding
actitvities
any specific behavior
activities
as much as possible as their ancestors did.
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food
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nutrients value has to
given
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give
importance
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importance, instead
instead
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of
voumetric
using human physical characteristics (face shape, finger prints, etc) for identification
biometric
productiontion
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and
this
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can be achieved by organic farming for good
health
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.

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