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In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household task.

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Many people across the globe believed, increased in number of working women and men professional inflate the cogent idea of sharing household responsibilities. I agree with
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 statement and believe sharing is caring.
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, sharing of day to day responsibility breeds love and give no space to any sort of differences and misconception. Apart from that, it makes the relationship more robust and scale- up bond between partner. These
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types
 of amiable relationship
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give
 birth to “mutual understanding”. Mutual understanding defines the level of trust and cooperation in a relationship. According to a recent report published on Indian journal “The Times of India” cases of separation diminished significantly in
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a society
 where mutual understanding is alive.
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, it
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completely shuts
 the door for thinking where people believe, women are made only for household chores. Now a day’s government introduced umpteen
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schemes
 to promote feminism and several private
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firms
 are providing
flexible work environment
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a flexible work environment
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for
 women. These stupendous ideas to provide support to women receives
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a round
 of applause from every corner of society. Women are actively participating in various roles and responsibilities. At
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the moment
, women can be seen at different role like from a waitress to a commercial pilot. To conclude, sharing plays a pivotal role in developing a stronger bond between spouse and it eliminates long-established thinking about women in society.
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