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Education from preschool through university should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #university #government #students
The notion that the
government
 ought to provide free
education
 from nursery school to university by financing the
education
 sector is highly debatable partly because of the numerous rationales on both sides of
this
 controversy. I, for one, firmly stand in favour of the aforementioned statement as countless experts in
this
sunject
the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
subject
 matter.
This
 essay aims to elaborate the factors that compelled me to support the idea and present the arguments to those on the other side of the idea.
First
 of all,
education
 is one of the basic needs of the citizens of a country;
therefore
, it should definitely be free of cost. As people are contributing to the country’s economy by paying taxes, it is a responsibility of the
government
 to ensure that each and every citizen get the equal opportunity to gain knowledge and receive formal
education
. In Canada,
for example
, an adult
have
Suggestion
has
 to pay high rate of income tax;
as a result
, the
canadian
of or relating to Canada or its people
Canadian
government
 offers free
education
 to the
domastic
of concern to or concerning the internal affairs of a nation
domestic
 students.
Moreover
, poverty, one of the major
problem
Suggestion
problems
 in developing and underdeveloped countries, can certainly be reduced if people are made to be educated.
In other words
, if the
government
 provides free
aducation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
educational
, poor people will be able to achieve a higher degree, which will help them get a good job with a handsome salary. As a
consequesce
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequence
, not only the
individuals but
Accept comma addition
individuals, but
 the country’s economy
also
 will be benefited. While it is understandable why some would feel inclined to oppose the idea, the reasons behind their reluctance are motivated by
sunjective
taking place within the mind and modified by individual bias
subjective
 biases. For starter, people will be
underestimate
Suggestion
underestimating
 the value of
education
 if it is offered free of cost.
However
, in reality it is untrue. Needless to say, most, if not all, scholarly opinions
also
 disprove their opinion on different groups.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic background
  • equitable society
  • government-funded
  • higher quality standards
  • financial limitations
  • inefficiencies
  • wasteful spending
  • cost-effective
  • innovate
  • undervaluing
  • dropout rates
  • financial burden
  • well-being
  • higher education uptake
  • increased taxes
  • reallocation
  • vital sectors
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