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Some people think it is important to know National news while others have opinion that International news are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #news
With
increase
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the increase
an increase
 in broadcasting networks and ease of internet availability, people have access to learning and educating themselves about national and inter international events. While there is a percentile of
population
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the population
 who believes National news is more important as it boasts patriotism.
On the other hand
, there are few who believe that International news is of more
importance
 to know about global trends. In
this
 essay, we shall discuss both views and conclude that both are of equal
importance
. Local news
are
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is
 a debatable topic among
local community
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local communities
the local community
at
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in
of
 Pakistan. During dinner times it gives them an opportunity to discuss socio-political reforms at district government. Families take
this
 as an opportunity to enlighten young children about political and religious leaders.
For example
, Mr. Nawaz Sharef ex Prime Minister of Pakistan current dwelling and wealth are a matter of pride. People indulge in local broadcasts to acquire knowledge and boast among friends. While they forget about
current economic crisis
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the current economic crisis
 and global ratings of Pakistan.
On the other hand
, there are a few who consider International news of more
importance
 as it provides information about global trading policies, political conflicts and rating of Pakistan as
third world nation
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a third world nation
. For them it is necessary to form future reforms based on international media. But they tend to overlook the fact that without reforms at local community
this
 would not be possible on
worldwide level
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a worldwide level
. In summary, both National and International news are of equal
importance
 and should be read in conjunction with each other. Use of single source may not lead to better perspective.
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