Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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Physical illness is getting increasingly high among people who are working, due to avoiding

exercise

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or not doing it at all. To live a better and healthy

life

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, Work-

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balance is essential and in

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essay we will be looking at the causes of

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issue and I will be presenting possible solutions to solve

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problem. Many people are placing themselves in a hectic

work-load

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is a competitive domain, they work longer hours than before and considers that they can get to a good position and rank by doing so.

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, they constantly ignore the importance of an

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and consider that it would not harm them in the future as they think that their

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is good and would not be affected by ignoring it.

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, in Japan, People have taken their work so seriously that they have forgotten their

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such

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as people who are related to them, which

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bringing the future of Japan at stake. As a responsible employer, organization should provide a gym facility for its staff members and should make a policy that every employee should go to the gym and do

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for at least an hour. By providing an

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in house

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area, employees can be encouraged to join and do the

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, there should be seminars and workshops where working people should be educated that a little

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can bring

health

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and fitness, and work concentration in

thier

of them or themselves

their

life

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, in a recent survey in America, People who exercises daily have better

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and relations and have better productivity

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they performs well in any given task. Physical activity or

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is a great source of healthy and active lifestyle, avoiding it can damage one's

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and work-

life

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. We looked at the possible causes of

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issue and I

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suggested that to

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and career growth, it is imperative to do exercises on the daily basis.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

325 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Time constraints
Sedentary lifestyle
Passive leisure activities
Workplace wellness programs
Active commuting
Subsidized
Public awareness
Health benefits
Incentivizing
Accessible public spaces

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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important what are the causes of this? Is this a positive or negative development?

It is said that advertisement is not always necessary because consumers anyway buy the product if a product has very good quality.To what extent,do you agree with this statement?