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there are five major types of fast food in Melbourne, how do you think?

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The table illustrates people in Melbourne consumed the amount of five major types of fast
food
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 in 2005, present and 2025. Overall, it can be seen that
hamburger
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 and fried
chicken
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 are the top of fast
food
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consumption
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 over the period.
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,
hamburger
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 and fried
chicken
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 accounted for over 50% of the five major fast
food
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 eaten.
However
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, from 2005 to 2025, the proportion of
hamburger
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 and fried
chicken
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 went down, 80% and 60% of five major fast
food
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 respectively.
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, the
consumption
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 amount of fried rice and noodle remained stable, and the proportion of major fast
food
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 is decreasing.
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, a significant increase in the amount of Salad
consumption
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 can be found. There is a 200% increase comparing now and 2005, and 170% growth rate forecasting in 2025. By 2025, it is expected that top three major fast
food
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,
hamburger
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, fried
chicken
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, and Salad accounted 88% of major fast
food
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consumption
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.
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