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The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs numerous governments expenditure. This money should be used in new housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

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In these modern world, government expenditure is being used for more of their own purposes.
the
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The
 remaking of the old infrastructures in towns cost a lot amount of money from
government
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the government
.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would totally agree with the statement that more money
should be spend
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should be spent
 on building new homes for poorer society and the improved road systems.
This
 essay will discuss why agreed statement is much more important than the remaking of old buildings.
To begin
 with, the governments
have always vary
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have always varied
 about more the development in cities and major urban areas.
because
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Because
 of these situations they forget about the poorer places and
villages
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villages, for
for instance
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 live in a place which is situated in
cities centre
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the city centre
city centre
city's centre
 so
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 get my house renovated by municipalities whereas
incase
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in case
 of my friend, who lives in an inside
village he
Accept comma addition
village, he
 asks me to complain about the drastic
infrastuctres
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructures
 there which are not even noticed by governments and the road not even connected to cities as its tough for him access good hospital.These are one case.
This
 all drastic ways
shows
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show
 more of the
goverments
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government's
governments
faultness
a wrong action attributable to bad judgment or ignorance or inattention
faults
.
it
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It
 should be changed by giving more developments to poorer societies and all the road growth
,
Accept space
,
as by
develeping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
 more strong buildings and all bridges connected so that they can access to all the
availibilty
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available
availability
 as for urban people.
in
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In
 conclusion
,
Accept space
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would strongly argue that the
goverments
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government's
governments
 expenditure
should be spend
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should spend
 more on the
facilties
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Facilties
facts
 of small villages and less income
socities
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society
societies
securities
 rather than using it for
deeveloping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
 the more urban places.

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