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Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Recently, some institutions make more money by selling junk foods to student during their afternoon break. In my opinion, I believe that the practice of selling unhealthy
food
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 and sugary drinks to
student
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students
 by
school
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the school
 is a negative development with the following reasons.
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 with, one reason I believe that school selling unhealthy
food
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 to pupil is a negative development is that it leads to excess body fat. Science proves that
food
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 containing high sugary content and consumed daily may have a harmful impact on one’s
health
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, the result of
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 in a growing child’s system is obesity.
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, in today’s society, there's an "obesity epidemic" and school management
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wants
 to just hand scholar junk
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 right in front of their faces when these kids hardly get enough exercise is questionable. A recent research by UNICEF revealed that 65% of adults are currently battling with excessive weight which could be the result of diets consumed in childhood stage.
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, being overweight plays an important role in
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human
 emotion
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 as depression and an obese child may be traumatized owing to constant taunt from
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the fellow peer group
. Another point to consider, colleges using sugar-sweetened beverages as a lucrative mean to an end are impacting negatively to the student’s future
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. It can be observed from public
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 record that soft drinks and processed
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 eaten
overtime
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over time
 usually bring about chronic diseases
which unfortunately
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which, unfortunately
, affect the
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 care cost of a country that rely on PAYE Tax for medical insurance.
For instance
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, WHO reveal a study that was carried out on the
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 sector of
USA
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the USA
 and 50% of
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the treatment
 were mostly
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linked
 to obesity-related
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. These and many more are the contributing factors to why unhealthy and junk
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 sold or given during lunch to
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students
the student
a student
 are harmful. Conclusively, based on the above reasons, I believe that it is a negative development why schools find it profitable to sell snacks with high calories to pupil.
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