You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visit you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

Dear Manager, I am writing

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mail to draw your attention to some unusual activities done by some individuals at the local swimming pool. In summer, I usually go to the swimming lagoon with my family once a week, because it is the best way to prevent heat and enjoy quality time with my wife and son.

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Sunday as usual, when I went there with my family I noticed that some strangers people taking photos of other people. I know mobile phones are allowed but, only for personal use. When I knew about it immediately I uniform to the swimming bath staff and, they caught the suspect checking their phones and told him to delete those photos at the time.

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, I do not think

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is a permanent solution. To stop

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kind of activity in future you have to take strict action against them, and maybe you have to ban mobile devices at the swimming basin

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because nobody knows what will happen in the future. Thank you for understanding and I hope you take action against it and hope for positive change. Yours faithfully, XYZ

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coherence and cohesion

Try to clearly separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs.

task achievement

Be cautious with word choices; for example, use 'strangers' instead of 'some strangers people'.

coherence and cohesion

Consider using more varied sentence structures for better engagement.

task achievement

You've addressed the problem clearly and provided a personal experience.

coherence and cohesion

The closing was polite and appropriate for a letter to a manager.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

189 words

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