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You visited a hotel last week and left some items behind. Write a letter to the manager stating 1. Details of your stay 2. How important the items are to you 3. How you would want the items to the sent to you

#hotel #week #items #manager #sent
Dear Sir, My name is Adriel, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about my wedding
band
 and a hard drive I forgot in your hotel room following my check-out on Saturday. My company made an online reservation on the 21st of August on my behalf. I checked in on the evening of 22nd August into room 406 due to
cancellation
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the cancellation
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 of
flight
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the flight
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 for
the
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an
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 earlier date.
Although
,
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 the duration of my stay was for a week, I had to check out early on Saturday in order to catch the
last
 flight back to Nigeria. In total, I spent 6days
instead
 of 7 days in the hotel. I hurriedly left your hotel on the said date and I forgot my wedding
band
 and a hard drive on top of the drawer
next
 to the bed. I noticed my
band
 was gone when my husband asked me
of
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 it. As you know,
wedding
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a wedding
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band
 signifies a union between two people and
this
 was a gift of love from my husband to me on our wedding day,
therefore
 it is imperative I find it and have it sent back as soon as possible.
In addition
 to that, the hard drive contains all the information and pictures made from the conference I attended, as
such
 my resumption on Monday will be inconclusive without it as I need to make a presentation. I have made an arrangement with a logistic company, DHL precisely to pick
up
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it up
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 on Sunday and have it delivered to me on Monday unfailingly.
However
, if there is a delay from the
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postman
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post man
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postman
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, please could you make an alternative arrangement for
a
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swift delivery of the items.
Moreover
, if you require
further
 information like my delivery address, kindly reach me on 03565610231. I anticipate your kind response. Thank you. Yours faithfully, Adriel Anderson.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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