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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#visitors #attractions
It is argued that
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
travelling
 from overseas should be charged more than local residents to
visit
 important sites and monuments. I completely disagree with
this
 idea. ​ Maintenance of the historical and cultural attractions is the main reason for the argument to charge more to the foreign
tourists but
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tourists, but
 in my knowledge, governments keep the fund reserved for
such
 places.
Also
 the states where these places are, already getting subsidies from the government.
Moreover
, foreign tourists
also
 contribute to the economy of that country where they
visit
 by spending on a wide range of goods and services, like hotels, food, transport etc.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 apart from
tourism industry
Suggestion
the tourism industry
, there are many industries related to the tourism
industry which
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industry, which
 are benefiting and increasing the revenue of the
countries so
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countries, so
 governments should encourage people from the rest part of the world to
visit
 their countries. ​ Tourists always plan a budget before visiting any places. If they realised that the price is higher in a particular country to
visit
 historical and cultural attractions, they would perhaps not prefer to go to there and may change their destination. Charging tourists on the basis of nationality is
also
 a short sighted view. Reputation is the base of tourism industry so
this
 idea won’t help to promote the nation’s cultural heritage. The relationship of the country and their tourists are like
host
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a host
the host
 and guest and if
this
 relationship is cordial, there would be no risk of insufficient funding or the damage
of
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to
 reputation. ​ To conclude, I believe that it would be counterproductive to make them pay more than local residents so every effort should be made to attract tourists from overseas.

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