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The column chart shows the percentage of male and female in various age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The column chart shows the percentage of male and female in various age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
#column #percentage #age #groups #activity
The column chart illustrates the proportion of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in various age
groups
 who did
regular
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a regular
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 physical activity in 2010. As can be seen,
the
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 period from 25 to over,
female
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females
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 always registered percentages higher than male
According to
 the given chart, the female’ age
groups
 from 15
years
 old to 54
years
 old,
which
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increase from 47.7 to 53.3
percent
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 before going down to 47.1
percent
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 in the 65
years
 and over
group
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the group
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.
While
 the male age
groups
 declined significantly from 52.8
percent
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, 42.2percent, 39.5
percent
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 respectively in 3
groups
, which are 15
years
 old to 24
years
 old , 25
years
 old to 34 , and 35
years
 old
44
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years
 old, after that ,
the
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percentage in 3
groups
 from 45 to over , which was upbeat from 43.1
percent
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 in 45 to 54
years
 old and reached 46.7
percent
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 in the very
last
 group. To summarize, men did regular activity physical more often than women during their
teenager
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 and
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mid-twenties
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mid -twenties
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mid-twenties
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 After
mid-twenties
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the mid-twenties
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,
however
, men’s percentage
was
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decreased and women’s percentage was
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an increase
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increase
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, years, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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