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Certain demographics of society believe that social media
such
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 as newspaper, television and the internet have the right to publish people’s private
life
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. Whereas, other express conflicting viewpoints.
This
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 essay will argue two opposing ideas.
To begin
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 with, public personalities have a private
life
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 and they have a right to shield from others. Everybody has flaws. In some ways, social media use the weaknesses of people’s private
life
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 as a trend,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 the news of celebrities.
This
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 business must be condemned.
Furthermore
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, publishing the weaknesses of celebrities might have a negative impact on who admire them.
For instance
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, some people, especially the teenagers, choose a famous person as
life
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 champion.
However
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, divulging a bad side of their hero has a bad effect on them. On the other side, there is a complementary relationship between celebrities and the media. One depends on the others for existence. Celebrities need media
attentions
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attention
 to
stablish
set up or found
establish
stabilize
 themselves in the industry and build their career.
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, many people are interested in following celebrity’s style and
life
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. Media merely satisfied
this
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 need because it makes sound trend for them. To sum up, as long as people want to know about famous people’s
life
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,
such
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 as celebrities, media can play a satisfied role with publishing photos and videos.
However
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, I believe that public personalities
also
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 have right to privacy. So, media must draw a line in writing about famous people.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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