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Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation have not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solution to combat this problem? Support your answers with specific reasons and example.

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It has been argued by many that most of the countries of the world are facing problems of environmental pollution and are working hard to control it, but the situation is getting worse. In my opinion, I think that the main reasons include deforestation and increased combustion of petroleum products.
This
 issue can be solved by increased plantation of trees and shifting to smoke free energy sources. On the one hand, the industrial growth is the key factor responsible for degradation of the environment.
Firstly
, every industry uses the crude oil and the burning produces toxic gases.
Secondly
, for the expansion of factories, the humans cut down trees, which not only enhance the polluted air, but
also
 increase the soil erosion.
Furthermore
, there are more number of cars on the roads due to the economic growth and
this
also
 has a negative effect on the surroundings. So, all these disrupt the equilibrium of nature and has a devastating effect on the atmosphere.
For instance
, according to a recent research, there is an increase of 56% in the amount of smoke in the London city.
On the other hand
, I think that to solve
this
 issue we have to follow a saying " the greener the place, the healthier the population''. The government should create awareness among the masses to plant more trees and there should be laws to punish those who cut them without permission of the competent authority.
Moreover
, introduction of the environmental friendly fuels should be encouraged and made easily available as well. All together, it will help the state to fight against the pollutants.
For example
, the French people have introduced electrically driven vehicles in the city of Paris to counter the hazards of dirty air. To conclude, I believe that it's not merely the responsibility of the rulers to clean the surroundings,
rather it's
Accept comma addition
rather, it's
 the duty of every citizen to realise
this
 thing and play his role in making the homeland pure and disease free.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental degradation
  • Fossil fuels
  • Air and water pollution
  • Deforestation
  • Biodiversity
  • Enforcement of environmental laws
  • Illegal dumping
  • Over-exploitation
  • Overpopulation
  • Waste production
  • Resource consumption
  • Climate change
  • Extreme weather events
  • Rising sea levels
  • Consumer culture
  • Overconsumption
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Emissions
  • Stricter environmental regulations
  • Enforcement
  • Reforestation
  • Conservation of natural habitats
  • Sustainable agricultural practices
  • Public awareness campaigns
  • Sustainable consumer behaviors
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