You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter . describe what you enjoyed about the course. . say how much cooking you've done since the course . suggest another cookery course you'd like school to offer.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to express my views on the cookery class which I have completed
last
month. You will be pleased to know that I had a wonderful time
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the class. Let me explain my experiences in more detail. I have
learn't
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learnt
many new recipes since I had enrolled in the
course
. I found the teaching staff very supportive and they kept me motivated.
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I got the opportunity to interact with many people, some of whom are still in contact with me. As we all come from different cultures and
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, the concept of Role Reversal in which we share the recipe of our cultural cuisine with each other was
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thoughtful concept and I personally found it very helpful.
Furthermore
,
this
course
has helped me to cook food at home which my family is loving it.
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I have been cooking daily as
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have developed
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interest after the completion of
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.
In addition
, I would like the school to offer me a
course
on Chinese cuisines so that I can widen my knowledge of cooking with different regional food items. I look forward to hearing from you.
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faithfully, Dhiren Rana

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