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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter, -say what the participants liked about the hotel -explain why they were unhappy about the food -suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future 매

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 letter to give you some feedback on your service
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 Friday when the senior managers of my company had a meeting at your hotel. In general, all the participants agreed that your hotel was
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 excellent meeting place. The conference room was bright and airy with comfortable chairs and wide tables.
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, in spite of the overall satisfaction with hotel facilities, everyone including myself was disappointed with the quality of food served for lunch. All the colleagues agreed on the fact that the food was stale, especially bread and some of the salads.
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the salmon was not the fresh raw fish that we had expected.
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, we did not enjoy the meal
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 your waiters were nice and friendly. I would like to make
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 for you. I recommend your chefs
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apply

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use fresh and healthy ingredients because unfresh salmon does not meet the expectation. I hope in future the quality of your food is able to match up to the quality of your service. Respectfully, David Jung

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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