International events like the football World Cup other international sports occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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International sports had gained immense attention from

past ten years

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the past ten years

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Majority

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The majority

of people have developed a deep

nationalism

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nationalistic

feeling for their countries specific sports like football

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cricket.Sometimes

this

patriotic nature towards a

game

can releasing international tensions between two countries and it is good for the developing countries in my opinion. Coming to the thought

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developing countries like India has gained a huge trend of sports to exemplify India won the world cup in 1983

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under

captaincy

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the captaincy

of Kapil dev in international cricket.Whenever, India had won against

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the nation had always enjoyed the pride and nation's love feeling.So as the mindset of civilized people is changing, tension's and rivalries between

there

of them or themselves

their

two nations have changed and governments had

also

started developing a good trade bond In Individual's

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now have started respecting the

game

either they win or lose

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a hatred sense

donot develop

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does not develop

do not develop

in them.

Moreover

, another

game

called football

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The level of craziness for its world cup cannot be predicted in mere. According a research by Sports

academy

a secondary school (usually private)

Academy

of London

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about 1 million of

population

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the population

have

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having

a sense of huge national respect towards their country.Because of education

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people are mentally developed And have

patriotic feel

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a patriotic feel

towards the

game

as they are very much attached to their

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

players.

For instance

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when Ronaldino

palyed

(of games) engaged in

played

a massive match against Netherlands

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after that too team lost the

game

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inspite

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in spite

of that,

also

player

shaked

a disassembled barrel; the parts packed for storage or shipment

shook

shakes

hand

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hands

with

opposition team captain

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the opposing team captain

opposing team captain

and showed respect to the winning team.

Such

instances leaves a great impact on the people watching them on television

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These events not only

entertains but

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entertains, but

also

imparts message

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imparts a message

to the youngsters a feeling of togetherness and love for other countries. To conclude, whether it is football or cricket world cup these events at a massive level changes the mentality of people and releases a sense of patriotism at a greater level and

refers to the speaker or writer

strongly agree

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with

this

opinion.

Thu Nov 28 2019

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
34Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

314 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

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6.5

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Topic Vocabulary:

international tensions
patriotic emotions
safe way
bring people together
friendly competition
peaceful interactions
express national pride
improve diplomatic relations
mutual understanding
cooperation
extreme national pride
aggression
violence
strike a balance

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