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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others contest those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. What is your position? Discuss both sides in your response.

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The architectural features of a building are often dictated by the owner’s preference.
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, a recent argument that the
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 shall be controlled by the governments has sparked a heated debate. Both views will be discussed based on commercial interests and cultural assassination respectively before a stand can be drawn. On the one hand, the paymaster is entitled to determine the final appearance of the building simply because it is an investment.
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, a famous contemporary café in Taipei city has been controversially designed to resemble jail facilities.
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 unique and fresh idea, the jail themed café has attracted thousands of customers and tourists alike since its establishment.
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 point shows the aesthetic feature of a building has a financial implication on the owner’s business.
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, the
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 is responsible to monitor the
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 of
building
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buildings
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 in order to preserve the nation’s cultural heritage.
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, a recent poll suggested that 70% of the residents were unhappy with the development of Bangkok city as the booming skyscrapers gradually diminish the nation’s identity. If the
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 of
building
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the building
 is controlled by the
government
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, the traditional features would be incorporated as part of the
regulations
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regulation
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government
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 in safeguarding the cultural image of its city. From the discussion above, it is felt both show merit and significance for the interest of the nation’s economy and tradition. It is concluded that the final
design
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 of a building shall be decided by the owner provided it complies with the
government
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 specifications and regulations.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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