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Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely, and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to lining in an independent house. Discuss both views and ggive your opinions.

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Everyone has different living standards either someone love to live in the
house
 and other love to live in an
apartment
. I
usually loves
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usually love
 to live in
an
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a
house
 because of a privacy. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss either living in an
apartments
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apartment
 is better or living in a bungalow. According to some people, living in a high rise
apartment
 make them very depressing. It solely depends on the nature of
inhabitants
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the inhabitants
 that if they are unsocial
then
 they can not socialize while living in an
apartment
 with other families living with you in another
apartment
of
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in
 the same building.
For example
, In
third
 world countries majority people
lives
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live
 in the
apartment
 so they adapt them self to socialize with other people living with them to avoid a loneliness.
On the other hand
, Living in
an
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a
house
 is beneficial because of various reasons. One of the common
reason
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reasons
 is a privacy, Everyone loves to have their own privacy so they opt for a private home
instead
 of an
apartments
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apartment
.
For example
, In
first
 world countries people prefer to live in a separate
house
 due to their private life and other factors. To sum up, I believe that living in a separate
house
 attracts me due to various advantages like you have your own private parking place, there will be no
children
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children's
 noise while playing and much more. Due to various reasons and conflicts in the personality, some people still
perfer
like better; value more highly
prefer
 living in a
house
 and some will prefer living in an
apartment
.
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