Governments prohibiting the underage children for getting fulltime jobs in certain countries. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, young adults who are below the age-limit to
work
are restricted for full-time
work
by the authorities. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
because young adults involved in workforce
for
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from
day long would face serious
health
issues while they
can not
can not
cannot
focus on their education and
consequently
lead to
child
exploitation.
To begin
with, young children being engaged in permanent
work
can not
can not
cannot
take their study seriously.
This
means, having wasted most of their
day time
the time after sunrise and before sunset while it is light outside
daytime
working, they would struggle to find adequate study
time which
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time, which
will lead
to obtain
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to obtaining
poor grades in academics and eventually would drop-out from primary or secondary levels.
For example
, many developing countries where
child
labour is accepted, permanent
child
workers are prevented from entering to universities due to their
work
responsibilities. Another reason to support
this
idea is that working full-time would put them at risk of being affected by
health
problems both physically and mentally. Some jobs require physical activities, which would result in under-aged children to suffer from serious
health
conditions.
This
would
also
put mental strain on them while performing physically demanding jobs for all day long. To illustrate,
percentage
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the percentage
of children taking mental
health
support
is
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are
higher in south
asian
a native or inhabitant of Asia
Asian
countries where children are allowed to
work
full-hours from the young age.
Finally
, working children would fall into victim of
child
exploitation.
In other words
, being under the age-limit for 8hours jobs, they are not protected by laws which result in receiving low wages while working equally as compared to adults.
However
, some destitute families require their offsprings to earn which would bring financial stability for the families, but the problems associated with full-time jobs for youngsters would outweigh that benefit. In conclusion, disruption in education, having
serious risk
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a serious risk
of being ill and getting lower remunerations make the notion of
forbiding
harshly uninviting or formidable in manner or appearance
forbidding
children to take part in 8hours jobs appeared to be effective and other countries ought to be encouraged by the success of
such
measure.
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