You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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Smoking is

major cause

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a major cause

the major cause

health

problem for

people including

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people, including

the person who smokes. The government must prohibit smoking in public place.

This

essay discusses about

health

issues related to smoking and

further

importance of banning

this

in common places.

Eventhough

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Even though

there are many programmes and advertisements publish in media to educate the public about the

significant

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significance

signification

of the issues related to

cigerate

finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking

cigarette

but

this

is not resolved yet.

For instance

cigarate

finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking

cigarette

box

itself it

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itself, it

mention

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mentions

that smokes is prime cancer cause of liver

cancer but

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cancer, but

smokers do not take it

serious

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seriously

Furthermore

this

not only creates

health issue

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a health issue

health issues

for

consumer but

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consumers, but

consumers but

the consumer but

also

for others.

For example

recent survey

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a recent survey

recent surveys

says that increased breathing problems among children found in family members who smokes often at home.

Therefore

, Smoking is harmful to everyone in the society.

On the other hand

, Adicted persons can not control their bad habit they

continuously smoking

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are continuously smoking

continuously smoke

at common places

such

buses and markets. People inhale smoke much higher than the smoker when they release smoke in public places. My son

get

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gets

is getting

ashtma attack

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an asthma attack

asthma attack

rapidly when he stands near by a person who smokes for

sometime

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some time

Therefore people

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Therefore, people

must not smoke in public places. In conclusion, Smoking

cause

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causes

huge damage in public

health

at home and common areas.

Therefore

the government

must banned

Suggestion

must ban

this

strictly.

This

will prevent everyone from cancers and other

health

issues.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

227 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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