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In some countries older people are being encouraged to work longer and not to retire. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working beyond retirement age.

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Every country has its own defined
retirement
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age
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.
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 some countries prefer people with vast experience in certain jobs and encourage them to work beyond their
retirement
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age
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.
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 decision has its own benefits and disbenefits which directly depends on the nature of the job. Following passages will evaluate
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 propositions. Experience is undeniably a substantial part behind every human success. An experienced
person
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 is always able to take better decisions due to his earlier encounters with relevant circumstances which comes from his decade long service life.
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person
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not only take
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doesn't only take
 better
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decisions, but
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 can predict future outcomes based on
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 decisions.
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, a
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 with experience is always respected and followed by his /her co-workers which results in a productive office environment.
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 experience in decision making brings success to a company, it is not that true for jobs where extensive physical involvement is needed.
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 jobs are better suited for young people. Experience comes with
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,
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, physical capabilities decline after
certain stage
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a certain stage
certain stages
 of our life which results in fatigue or inability to lift or move heavy objects.
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, an experienced
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 does not bring anything to
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services rather
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services, rather
 it affects the productivity of the job. In conclusion, Working beyond
retirement
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age
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 largely depends on the nature of the job. An experienced
person
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 is always better in decision making and that makes them a perfect fit for jobs at managerial positions and should be encouraged to work beyond their
retirement
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age
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. Whereas, Jobs requiring extensive use of physical labour are not benefited by experienced and aged people and they should be encouraged to retire at
certain
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a certain age
age
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 of their life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • standard of living
  • ameliorated
  • mentoring
  • physical health
  • mental decline
  • workforce diversity
  • exacerbate
  • quality of life
  • employment opportunities
  • work-life imbalance
  • ageism
  • retirement planning
  • pension funds
  • job market dynamics
  • seniority
  • compulsory retirement age
  • productive capacity
  • intergenerational collaboration
  • mentality
  • employer attitudes
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