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Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

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In
this
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 contemporary world, people should allowed to decide their way of
life
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, which is typical of a particular person and varies from person to person. I don't appreciate the idea of
authorities declaration
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the authorities declaration
 on
individual's
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the individual's lifestyle
an individual's lifestyle
lifestyle
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, because it affects the freedom and the rate of acceptance by the people in society will be low. So I would encourage the view of people to decide on their
lifestyle
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.
To begin
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 with, every individual
have
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has
 rights to design their own
life
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, if
this
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 is taken over by the
government
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, it would be against the democracy. In ancient days, when people were ruled by kings, unfortunately the whole country
have
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has
 to act according to the single man's decision, regardless of their own desire. If the
government
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 does the same in current times, it will literally replicate the dictator's rule.
Hence
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, people should be allowed to taste the freedom of
life
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. As a matter of fact,
number
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the number
a number
 of people following the
government
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 rules are relatively less. There
are
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is
 a plethora of rules and regulation, which are
not not
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not
 being followed by the public.
Then
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 think about
government
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 amending rules on lifestyles, will the people follow?- It is very clear that the citizen will never follow it. Almost all the activities are regulated by
rule
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a rule
 like traffic rules, income tax rule
etc
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, in
such
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 a scenario the rules
for
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of
life
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 style will be least bothered.
Therefore
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,
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government
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a government
 undertaking people's
lifestyle
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 decisions will not
workout
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work out
 and difficult to bring into action. To sum up,
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government
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the government
 should not interfere
in
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with
 the individual's liberty to set their
lifestyle
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.
Moreover
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, though the
government
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 pass
such
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 rules, it will be definitely neglected by the public.

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