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Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

#governments #decisions #people #lifestyle
In
this
 contemporary world, people should allowed to decide their way of
life
, which is typical of a particular person and varies from person to person. I don't appreciate the idea of
authorities declaration
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the authorities declaration
 on
individual's
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the individual's lifestyle
an individual's lifestyle
lifestyle
, because it affects the freedom and the rate of acceptance by the people in society will be low. So I would encourage the view of people to decide on their
lifestyle
.
To begin
 with, every individual
have
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has
 rights to design their own
life
, if
this
 is taken over by the
government
, it would be against the democracy. In ancient days, when people were ruled by kings, unfortunately the whole country
have
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has
 to act according to the single man's decision, regardless of their own desire. If the
government
 does the same in current times, it will literally replicate the dictator's rule.
Hence
, people should be allowed to taste the freedom of
life
. As a matter of fact,
number
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the number
a number
 of people following the
government
 rules are relatively less. There
are
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is
 a plethora of rules and regulation, which are
not not
negation of a word or group of words
not
 being followed by the public.
Then
 think about
government
 amending rules on lifestyles, will the people follow?- It is very clear that the citizen will never follow it. Almost all the activities are regulated by
rule
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a rule
 like traffic rules, income tax rule
etc
, in
such
 a scenario the rules
for
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of
life
 style will be least bothered.
Therefore
,
government
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a government
 undertaking people's
lifestyle
 decisions will not
workout
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work out
 and difficult to bring into action. To sum up,
government
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the government
 should not interfere
in
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with
 the individual's liberty to set their
lifestyle
.
Moreover
, though the
government
 pass
such
 rules, it will be definitely neglected by the public.
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