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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and Math. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skills be made as fourth skill to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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Due to the technological development there are people who believe that current system of
education
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 which concentrated on development of basic skills
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 as reading, writing and calculation should be extended by adding
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-based proficiency. I totally agree with
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 suggestion and I reckon that the digital literacy must be compulsory in the curriculum both
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 schools and in universities. The humanity has made an incredible leap for the
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 decades;
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, the ongoing primary
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 has become antiquated and does not meet modern requirements.
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, current pupils do not practise effective skills, nor do they enjoy in fact the tuition. To keep up with the time educational institutions must shift academic process by the application of basic
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 subjects
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 as editing of documents, sheets and presentations as well as the understanding of the internet technologies. Another advantage of
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the implementation
 of the elementary informatics in schools is the fact that
the higher
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higher
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 has already transformed to meet existing requirements.
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, it will be difficult to succeed in universities without some
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 abilities.
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, present working conditions require a good level of
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 abilities because of the
digitalization
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 and the
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development
 of remote working.
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, even if those capabilities are not called for the future
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 or work it will be useful in the every day life and facilitate daily routine. To conclude,
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schools
the school
 should allow to get the knack of the fundamental
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 literacy to make children more adapted for
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a modern world
the modern world
. Those skills permit successfully manage
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 higher
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 and working duties.

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