In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is popular that regardless of their gender people
are working
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all
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day to lead a happy life. In most of the countries, boys and girls are doing
full-time
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job.
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, it is reasonable for
man
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men
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and women to exchange their domestic
work
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.I Completely agree with the statement because it increases affection,
respect
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and respect
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on
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each other and
allow
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them to live independently in future. It is a good idea to divide some
part
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parts
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of the housework with others so that they can complete all the
work
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faster without any
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work load
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workload
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for each other.
This
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allows them to be on time
in
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their respective
work
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. It
better
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to have an idea about different household works so that people can save money which they give to servants.
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,
since
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3 years my aunt and uncle
works
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have worked
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for the same
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company(Wipro), I
frequenlty
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frequently
visit there to look after their children.
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, I was shocked when my uncle
is
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was
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cleaning utensils and at the same time my aunt
is
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was
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preparing dinner
then
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I realized that they
have
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so much
of
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respect and love
on
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for
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each other.
By
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spending all
the
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day in the office,
couple
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the couple
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return
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to
house
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the house
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and feel
like
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hungry. Only one person cannot do all the
work
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alone to
preparing
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prepare
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food.
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, they must divide the
work
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so that they can eat and relax after having dinner. These days people are visiting
to
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various places on behalf of
company
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the company
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to represent their project or product to various delegates. So it is
better
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a better
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idea,
either
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whether
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it is men or women to lead independent
life
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lives
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without any risk and lead happy
life
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lives
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. In conclusion, individuals should learn how to keep their houses clean and do their household works are important. So that they can save money
instead
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of giving to servants.
By dividing
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work
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with others will reduce
burden
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the burden
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on others and complete the
work
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fast
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quickly
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.
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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
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