In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is popular that regardless of their gender people

are working

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work

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all

the

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apply

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day to lead a happy life. In most of the countries, boys and girls are doing

full-time

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a full-time

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job.

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, it is reasonable for

man

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men

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and women to exchange their domestic

work

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.I Completely agree with the statement because it increases affection,

respect

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and respect

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for

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each other and

allow

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allows

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them to live independently in future. It is a good idea to divide some

part

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parts

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of the housework with others so that they can complete all the

work

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faster without any

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work load

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workload

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for each other.

This

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allows them to be on time

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for

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their respective

work

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. It

better

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to have an idea about different household works so that people can save money which they give to servants.

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since

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for

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3 years my aunt and uncle

works

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have worked

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for the same

Multi-national

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Multinational

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company(Wipro), I

frequenlty

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frequently

visit there to look after their children.

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, I was shocked when my uncle

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was

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cleaning utensils and at the same time my aunt

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was

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preparing dinner

then

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I realized that they

have

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so much

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apply

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respect and love

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for

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each other.

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spending all

the

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apply

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day in the office,

couple

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the couple

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return

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returns

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house

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the house

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and feel

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apply

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hungry. Only one person cannot do all the

work

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alone to

preparing

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prepare

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food.

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, they must divide the

work

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so that they can eat and relax after having dinner. These days people are visiting

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apply

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various places on behalf of

company

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the company

a company

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to represent their project or product to various delegates. So it is

better

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a better

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idea,

either

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whether

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it is men or women to lead independent

life

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lives

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without any risk and lead happy

life

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lives

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. In conclusion, individuals should learn how to keep their houses clean and do their household works are important. So that they can save money

instead

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of giving to servants.

By dividing

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Dividing

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work

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with others will reduce

burden

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the burden

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on others and complete the

work

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fast

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quickly

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
36
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

317 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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In some parts of the world, the rate of divorce has increased dramatically over the past few decades. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.