In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is popular that regardless of their gender people
are working
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work

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all
the
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apply

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day to lead a happy life. In most of the countries, boys and girls are doing
full-time
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a full-time

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job.
Hence
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, it is reasonable for
man
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men

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and women to exchange their domestic
work
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.I Completely agree with the statement because it increases affection,
respect
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and respect

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on
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for

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each other and
allow
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allows

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them to live independently in future. It is a good idea to divide some
part
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parts

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of the housework with others so that they can complete all the
work
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faster without any
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work load
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workload

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for each other.
This
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allows them to be on time
in
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for

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their respective
work
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. It
better
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is better

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to have an idea about different household works so that people can save money which they give to servants.
For instance
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,
since
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for

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3 years my aunt and uncle
works
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have worked

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for the same
Multi-national
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Multinational

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company(Wipro), I
frequenlty
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frequently

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visit there to look after their children.
Firstly
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, I was shocked when my uncle
is
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was

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cleaning utensils and at the same time my aunt
is
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was

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preparing dinner
then
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I realized that they
have
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had

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so much
of
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apply

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respect and love
on
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for

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each other.
By
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After

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spending all
the
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apply

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day in the office,
couple
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the couple

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return
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returns

The plural verb return does not appear to agree with the singular subject couple. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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to
house
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the house

The noun phrase house seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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and feel
like
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apply

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hungry. Only one person cannot do all the
work
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alone to
preparing
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prepare

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food.
Hence
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, they must divide the
work
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so that they can eat and relax after having dinner. These days people are visiting
to
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apply

The preposition to seems unecessary after the verb visiting. Consider removing the preposition.

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various places on behalf of
company
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the company
a company

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to represent their project or product to various delegates. So it is
better
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a better

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idea,
either
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whether

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it is men or women to lead independent
life
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lives

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without any risk and lead happy
life
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lives

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. In conclusion, individuals should learn how to keep their houses clean and do their household works are important. So that they can save money
instead
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of giving to servants.
By dividing
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Dividing

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work
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with others will reduce
burden
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the burden

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on others and complete the
work
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fast
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quickly

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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