In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is popular that regardless of their gender people
are working
all Wrong verb form
work
the
day to lead a happy life. In most of the countries, boys and girls are doing Correct article usage
apply
full-time
job. Add an article
a full-time
Hence
, it is reasonable for man
and women to exchange their domestic Fix the agreement mistake
men
work
.I Completely agree with the statement because it increases affection, respect
Correct word choice
and respect
on
each other and Change preposition
for
allow
them to live independently in future. It is a good idea to divide some Correct subject-verb agreement
allows
part
of the housework with others so that they can complete all the Fix the agreement mistake
parts
work
faster without any work load
for each other. Correct your spelling
workload
This
allows them to be on time in
their respective Change preposition
for
work
. It better
to have an idea about different household works so that people can save money which they give to servants. Add a missing verb
is better
For instance
, since
3 years my aunt and uncleChange preposition
for
works
for the same Wrong verb form
have worked
Multi-national
company(Wipro), I Correct your spelling
Multinational
frequenlty
visit there to look after their children. Correct your spelling
frequently
Firstly
, I was shocked when my uncle is
cleaning utensils and at the same time my aunt Wrong verb form
was
is
preparing dinner Wrong verb form
was
then
I realized that they have
so much Wrong verb form
had
of
respect and love Change preposition
apply
on
each other. Change preposition
for
By
spending all Change preposition
After
the
day in the office, Correct article usage
apply
couple
Add an article
the couple
return
to Change the verb form
returns
house
and feel Add an article
the house
like
hungry. Only one person cannot do all the Change preposition
apply
work
alone to preparing
food. Wrong verb form
prepare
Hence
, they must divide the work
so that they can eat and relax after having dinner. These days people are visiting to
various places on behalf of Remove the preposition
apply
company
to represent their project or product to various delegates. So it is Add an article
the company
a company
better
idea, Add an article
a better
either
it is men or women to lead independent Correct word choice
whether
life
without any risk and lead happy Fix the agreement mistake
lives
life
. In conclusion, individuals should learn how to keep their houses clean and do their household works are important. So that they can save money Fix the agreement mistake
lives
instead
of giving to servants. By dividing
Change preposition
Dividing
work
with others will reduce burden
on others and complete the Add an article
the burden
work
fast
.Rephrase
quickly
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite