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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the cause of this? How can this problem be solved?

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Overcrowding in big cities have become a big hassle for countries.
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, there are many factors to
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, with possible solution we can solve
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 big change.
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, the main shift for people to come to major metropolitan is, under-developed small cities, village and towns. It is often seen that these cities are ignored by the
government
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 in terms of under-developed education, lack of proper
healthcare
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health care
, and poor living standards etc. With
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, residents of these places are forced to migrate to metros.
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, major investment, development, and multinational funding
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are generally happening
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 in big cities, which provides more jobs and opportunity to start a business. Because of required facilities, every multinational company wants to open their office or industry in a major city rather than going to a remote place. To solve the above problem, by developing small towns, village is the best answer to the problem. If the
government
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 had developed all tier-2 cities, people would not have wanted to move to big cities. By providing all the facilities which should have in a city like, better job opportunity, standardized
healthcare
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health care
, people would definitely want to stay back and with
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 the major metros will be less burdened.
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, in Canada, every community and village are looked upon by the
government
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, so the people should not feel that they do not have any other option than to migrate to another place. In conclusion, there are many factors which lead
to overcrowd
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to overcrowding
 a major
metropolitan
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metropolis
. At the same time, if a
government
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 closely address the problem, it can deal with
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 setback.

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