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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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Nowadays there is great debate about whether or not advertisements are beneficial to us. On the one hand, some people believe that ads drive us to purchase unnecessary products.
On the other hand
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, others advocate that adverts help us to identify new products in the market that could develop and improve our quality of life. In my opinion, I agree that advertisements are the key to find the most adequate product. While some ads can lead people to buy goods that they do not necessarily need, I believe that it brings more advantages than disadvantages to our lives.
Firstly
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, adverts help us
saving
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save
time
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 since it illustrates the products and explain their features in a few seconds. By having access to TV commercials or magazine ads, we have the opportunity to identify new products and compare them without having to go physically to stores. If we didn’t have access to ads, we would probably spend hours in supermarkets trying to figure what the purpose of each product is.
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, the way that a brand advertises their products and expresses itself to the audience, allow us to identify if the company is trustable or not. The most famous brands make memorable and eye-catching advertisings, most of the
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 using renowned actors. By doing that, they make the customers feel that they are buying something from a secure business and that the product is trustworthy. In conclusion, advertisements are paramount due to the fact that it provides a clear understanding of different kind of products in a short period of
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. It not only helps people to save their
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 as well as
allows
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allowing
to allow
 the customers to identify which brand they identify with the most.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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