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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach?

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the traditional
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method
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 of teaching
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 being replaced by new technology. There are both advantages and disadvantages
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 the change. In the past, for
students
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 to gain knowledge, they had to go directly
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 lecture.
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 sometimes would be difficult for some
students
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 thereby missing their
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, with new technology, they can attend
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class from anywhere.
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,
students
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 are able to choose their own time for the lecture.
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,
classes
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 on online sites can be attended at their
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 time which is a huge advantage.
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, lectures through computers become very redundant thereby making
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 very boring.
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,
students
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 will not be able to get
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 or make friends if they attend
classes
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 from their own places. In short, both the traditional method and modern technology have their own advantages and
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disadvantages
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.
Students
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 should select the suitable method
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 their convenience.

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Task Response
Your essay provides a relevant response to the given prompt. You discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of replacing traditional teaching methods with new technology. Ensure to elaborate more on the disadvantages to provide a balanced argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a basic logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing advantages and disadvantages, and a short conclusion. To improve coherence and cohesion, consider using transition words and phrases to connect ideas more effectively.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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