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Last month you had an overseas holiday with some friends where you stayed at their house. They have just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: • Thank them for the holiday and the photos. • Explain why you didn’t write earlier. • Invite them to come and stay with you.

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Hi Anny, Riya and Pinky, Hope
this
 letter finds you all in radiant health and the best of spirits. I’m writing to thank you all for the wonderful memories we had and the awesome snaps I received.
Firstly
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heartily
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 thanks for the indelible impression you all made on me. It will really be a
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lifetime
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life time
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 moment to cherish. The photos I got were stunning and it took me again to those venturesome days. Some pictures were really funny and my sisters laughed out a lot after seeing those.
Actually
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 after returning from Singapore, I did not get
a
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time to write
you
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 as I went to see my aunt who was admitted to a hospital in Noida .Now she is discharged and am totally free. I am inviting you all
in
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 my place, Bangalore, India whenever you are free. There are a plethora of places to visit here and will have
a lots
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 of fun again.
Hoing
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Hoping
Going
Hong
 to see you all soon. Yours Lovingly, Neha
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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