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People say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work.

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Because of many reasons, every
people
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person
want
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wants
 to be successful. Some people suppose that success is "10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work".
This
 essay will discuss whether hard work was the best way to succeed, or talent is
also
 more vital. Talent is something that cannot be created. It exists inside every
people
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person
 since they were born. To clarify, I want to give an example of myself. When I was three years old, my parents took me to a piano class, which belongs to a good pianist. At
first
 I was really excited. But after a few lessons, I find playing that instrument extremely difficult. I tried very hard.
However
, I stopped learning when I finished
an
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a
 three-month course. I realized that I had no talent for playing the piano and I was not capable of doing something that I am not good at.
Furthermore
, "diligence in place of intelligence". Maybe you could not do
something
an indefinite thing
anything
 in the
first
time
 because you are not skillful enough.
However
, if you practice
time
 and
time
 again, you will be good at it yourself. If failure
at
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of
 the
first
 attempt discourages you, you will not have enough motivation to perform the
next
time
. Everything like studying, working, playing sports or
musicial
characterized by or capable of producing music
musical
 instruments, all the
trainings
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training
 lead to the success.
For example
, a
high-school
a public secondary school usually including grades 9 through 12
highschool
 student cannot distinguish between tenses in English, but when she does lots of exercises, reads English books or watches many English teaching video on the internet, she will be proficient in using them. According to me, hard work is far more important than
giftedness
. No need to be good at a specific field, you just need to spend
time
 practicing as well and you will achieve success.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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