Sample 2: Internet crime is increasing rapidly as growing numbers of people purchase goods over the internet. What can be done to tackle this problem?

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age, a new online store can be opened in less than a day.

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has both positive and negative consequences. While, web-based shopping has eased customer experience tremendously, it has

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led to increased number of felonies.

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essay discusses several approaches to tackle and curb down

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problem.

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and foremost, consumers need to be more aware and vigilant. In the world of

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shopping, there is no face to face communication between the buyer and the seller.

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, the probability of a fraud is very high. In order to curtail

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, the buyer should check the reviews of the web-based store.

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, a quick check on the Facebook wall of the shop or google customer reviews will go a long way in making the consumer understand the fairness of the store.

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age of instant online shopping the government needs to come up with contemporary, stricter rules for the

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based shops.

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, it has been observed in South Africa that stricter punishments for

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frauds reduced the number of criminal activities by more than half.

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sellers can themselves come together to form a trade organisation to impose trade rules on every seller.

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will lead to a healthy and fair competition amongst the web sellers.

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can be coupled with cropping up of several watchdogs to moderate the availability of

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online stores. To conclude,

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it seems daunting, in my view, if some of the above steps are incorporated diligently, online criminal activities will reduce considerably.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

260 words

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Sample 2: Internet crime is increasing rapidly as growing numbers of people purchase goods over the internet. What can be done to tackle this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause and suggest a possible solution.

In some parts of the world, people have become more focused on themselves than their communities. What problems can this situation cause and how can they be solved?

People tend to work longer hours nowadays. Working long hours has a negative effect on themselves, their family and the society so working long hours should be restricted. Do you agree or disagree.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?