Sample 2: Internet crime is increasing rapidly as growing numbers of people purchase goods over the internet. What can be done to tackle this problem?

In
this
internet
age, a new online store can be opened in less than a day.
This
has both positive and negative consequences. While, web-based shopping has eased customer experience tremendously, it has
also
led to increased number of felonies.
This
essay discusses several approaches to tackle and curb down
this
problem.
First
and foremost, consumers need to be more aware and vigilant. In the world of
internet
shopping, there is no face to face communication between the buyer and the seller.
Therefore
, the probability of a fraud is very high. In order to curtail
this
, the buyer should check the reviews of the web-based store.
For example
, a quick check on the Facebook wall of the shop or google customer reviews will go a long way in making the consumer understand the fairness of the store.
Secondly
, in
this
age of instant online shopping the government needs to come up with contemporary, stricter rules for the
internet
based shops.
For instance
, it has been observed in South Africa that stricter punishments for
internet
frauds reduced the number of criminal activities by more than half.
Furthermore
, the
internet
sellers can themselves come together to form a trade organisation to impose trade rules on every seller.
This
will lead to a healthy and fair competition amongst the web sellers.
This
can be coupled with cropping up of several watchdogs to moderate the availability of
such
online stores. To conclude,
although
it seems daunting, in my view, if some of the above steps are incorporated diligently, online criminal activities will reduce considerably.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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