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Some people think that having a set retiremnet age(e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive at an earlier age. 1.Do you agree or disagree? 2.Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasond for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many people believe that having a fixed
retirement
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age
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,
such
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 as 65 years, irrespective of the work is unjustifiable and
instead
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 they consider old aged people should retire early in their lives. I completely agree with
this
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 viewpoint that there should be a flexible
retirement
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 scheme in every profession, which involve physical contact,
such
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 as a doctor, a computer expert in Information Technology or a labour in the manufacturing industry since these jobs require accuracy as well as efficiency to get executed.
Firstly
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, consistent
productivity
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 is the key to the success of an individual or a
company
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 in their fields.
Productivity
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 is a combined effort of a healthy physical body and mental capacity both of which,
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, deteriorates with
age
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 and
hence
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 the
productivity
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.
As a result
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, a
company
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, full of elderly people, may face negative consequences
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 as failing to achieve their targets on time.
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, the strenuous environment of a
company
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 may
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 exacerbate the declining health of their old aged employees, forcing the
company
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 to spend extra money on them.
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, in India, in 2016 when the quota
for
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of
 seats reserved for
elderly
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the elderly
 increased from a quarter to 35% in the public
sector
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 units, the same incurred a loss
by
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of
 15% from the previous year because a large part of their profits was spent on the health insurance of their hired employees, especially the older ones.
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, workers with an inconsistent
productivity
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 should be retired before the fixed
age
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 of 65 years.
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, the employment rate will improve by flexible
retirement
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.
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, when old aged people
are retired
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retire
 at an early
age
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, vacancies can be created in the job industry, which can be filled by young intellectuals having a healthy mind and body.
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, the
company
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 may not have to spend a lot of money on their health or training
since
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for
 the young employees
ususally
under normal conditions
usually
 keep themselves fit and fine as well as adaptable to the changes in technology or environment.
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 way the
company
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 will have a consistent profitability and the economy of the country will
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 remain stable. To illustrate, around 70% of employees in the IT
sector
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are
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is
 young adults of 25-30 years as they are capable of working flexible hours.
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,
their
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they're
 innovative and critical thinking is responsible for the prosperity of IT
sector
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, which contributes 15% to the GDP of India.
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, the
workers retired
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workers, retired
 at
early
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an early age
the early age
age
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 have the opportunity to explore the world to
fulfill
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fulfil
 their personal interests
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 as going on a foreign tour.
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, they will feel free of their work responsibilities. Experienced doctors or computer experts may either dedicate their time to research in their fields or open their clinics or
company
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, which in a way will definitely contribute to their country's growth. To conclude, flexible
retirement
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 is the need of
current job
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the current job sector
sector
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. Despite the loss of an experienced workforce, a more adaptable and innovative young workforce
run
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runs
 a
company
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 with better
productivity
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 which will eventually result in a country's growth.
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, retired people may explore their interests and even can support the society through their knowledge
instead
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 of continuous working at jobs.
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