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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for 6 months and look after their 6 year old kid. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with respect to an advertisement I saw in Australian magazine for looking after a
6 year
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 kid. Am really fortunate to find
this
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 advert. My name is Sara, a
full time
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full-time
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 nursemaid with 10 years of experience in
child
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a child
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 looking. As my work contract got expired
last
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 month I was looking out for a new job. Isn’t so much fun to be with kids? I love them! Even though am a graduate, I took
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 profession as a
nurse maid
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nursemaid
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 only due to my interest
to
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in
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 kiddies. When it comes to experience, I worked 5 years as a nursery maid in one of the
school
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 in Sydney and
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 I was a nursemaid for an
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eight-year
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eight year old
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 boy for about 5 years, which I just finished the contract with. I usually spend my day outs at my nearby orphanage, which is just
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walkable
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walk able
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 from my home. As I grew up there it’s like my
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 home. Could you please let me know
,
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apply
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 if you feel am a suitable person
.
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 You can call me
at
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on
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 878907899. Since I don’t have any family to stay with, I would be happier to be part of a family and
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 would be happier to be a nanny for the little one and
also
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 would be delighted to get a new job. Thanking
for
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 your consideration. Yours faithfully, Sara
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enthusiastic
  • child care
  • relevant qualifications
  • patience
  • reliable
  • creative
  • engage
  • explore
  • culture
  • language skills
  • participate
  • local events
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