You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for 6 months and look after their 6 year old kid. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with respect to an advertisement I saw in Australian magazine for looking after a

6 year

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kid. Am really fortunate to find

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advert. My name is Sara, a

full time

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full-time

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nursemaid with 10 years of experience in

child

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a child

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looking. As my work contract got expired

last

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month I was looking out for a new job. Isn’t so much fun to be with kids? I love them! Even though am a graduate, I took

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profession as a

nurse maid

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only due to my interest

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kiddies. When it comes to experience, I worked 5 years as a nursery maid in one of the

school

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in Sydney and

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I was a nursemaid for an

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eight-year

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eight year old

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boy for about 5 years, which I just finished the contract with. I usually spend my day outs at my nearby orphanage, which is just

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walkable

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walk able

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from my home. As I grew up there it’s like my

second

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home. Could you please let me know

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apply

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if you feel am a suitable person

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You can call me

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878907899. Since I don’t have any family to stay with, I would be happier to be part of a family and

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would be happier to be a nanny for the little one and

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would be delighted to get a new job. Thanking

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your consideration. Yours faithfully, Sara

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

233 words

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