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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural/and becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural/and becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graph illustrates that overgrazing, over-cultivation, deforestation and a few other factors are responsible for the decline in the productivity of
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agricultural land,
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region wise
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 in 1990. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
, the main factor responsible
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 production of land worldwide is overgrazing. The region most commonly affected is Europe,
whereas
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North America is the least. On the one hand, 35% of the earth's area used for growing crops is being destroyed by the grazing of animals.
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 account for the destruction of 30% and 28% of the productive surface respectively. Miscellaneous factors responsible are about 7% of the total.
On the other hand
, the destruction of land categorized
continent wise
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 has revealed that Europe is being targeted the most (23%),
while
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Oceania and
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North America are 13% and 5% respectively. In Europe, deforestation is
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 (9.8%),
whereas
 overgrazing is the lowest,
that is
 just 5.5%. The main reason for destruction in
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North America is deforestation (3.3%). Overgrazing is affecting
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Oceania the most,
that is
 11.3%.
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