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Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although
, there is no doubt that educational institutes are fond to give homework to pupils for Afterhour practice, it is important to consider the consequences on a student's life. While some believe that daily home assignments is unnecessary, I support the view that to become competent, everyday home-study after school is essential. On one hand, people who advocate daily class assignments as needless may argue that it is burden of education and an obstacle in child's overall development.
This
 is because leisure time activities are necessary to ease their academic stress and outdoor games, for physical and mental growth is predominant.
For example
, in order to maintain concentration in class, stress free mind is requisite so playtime should not be overrun by classwork.
In contrast
, if students will have adequate amount of time to play, they shall not suffer from diseases like cardiovascular, diabetes and low bone density at an early stage of life and
as a result
, they might have active and healthy life spans.
On the other hand
, I would argue that day-to-day homework is mandatory as revisions for learning. The reason for
this
 is that class work is challenging task, which is paramount for cognitive development and
also
 some subjects require everyday practice.
For instance
, while learning a new dialect, enhancement of vocabulary is vital, which is only achievable by constant practice. If,
instead
, teacher's pedagogy does not carry compulsions of daily revisions, the juvenile may suffer with less knowledge and skills, future might face adversity and as an outcome, strenuous tomorrows, which could be caused by hardship of standing among proficient. In conclusion, while curriculum work may seem as a liability on kids and overall growth obstruction to few, in my view, it is the key to cognitive development and secured future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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