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Some employee wants to able to contact their employee all the time. Does this development has advantages or disadvantages?

#employee #contact #time #development
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In
this
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 competitive world,
employer
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the employer
an employer
 wants to contact their staffs at any
time
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 for smooth operation of the business.
However
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,
this
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 could be a positive approach in one prospective whereas meanwhile there are some drawbacks, which I will discuss in
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 essay.
In
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On
 one
hand there
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hand, there
 are some jobs and the services which
operates
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operate
 round the clock.
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, medical professionals are expected to get a call from their workplace at any moment in order to save
patient’s
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the patient’s life
a patient’s life
life
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.
Also
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, the call
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 and outsourcing companies need their workforce ready all the
time
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 to support the project around
world
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the world
. These workers are accrued with the bonus, overtime pay, and penalty pay on holidays.
This
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 is
also
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 a great opportunity for people to earn extra money. On the flip
side it
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side, it
 is mostly found that employee gets agitated and feel tortured if their boss calls frequently on their day off. Working exhausting hours, a week an individual wants to spend a relaxing
time
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 with themselves and with their families. It is the
time
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 to tear down the stress from the mind. So frequently disturbing in their personal
time
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 creates resentment to toward the employer. A survey conducted in a local newspaper has shown that 95% of
employee
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employers
has left
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have left
 their
job due the
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job due to the
 frequent interruption
from
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of
 the officials’ head
In conclusion even
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In conclusion, even
 though getting the work done beyond the working hours seems to be fruitful in some aspect, it has many side effects including the productivity and attrition of the staffs. So, for a perfect work
life
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 balance it is better not to jumble up work
life
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 in a personal
life
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 unless in an emergency or the sensitive issue.
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