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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
There are different opinions on how employees should
dress
 at
work
, some t
hinks
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think
that they should have s
amrt
showing mental alertness and calculation and resourcefulness
smart
dressing, while others believe clothing is not as important as q
uality
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the quality
of
work
. In g
eneral I
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general, I
think
work
 quality is more important than how a person
dress
, unless it will affect their
job
 performance.
First
 of all, if a
n
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a
job
 d
o not have
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does not have
a required
dress
 code,
then
 clothing is not something that should be concerned. Take software developer as e
xample,
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an example
 they mostly
work
 in office with c
omputer,
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a computer
computers
 and don't need to talk to any client, how they
dress
 is strictly not related to how they perform.
Job
 performance should be a f
or
to a considerable degree; very much
far
more important than appearance, d
eveloper
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developers
the developer
will be fired if they cannot get their
work
 done, but s
eldomly
caused by poor d
erssing.
make or work out a plan for; devise
design
Moreover
, some of the
job
 will rate safety and c
omfortness
things that make you comfortable and at ease
comforts
more than appearance. If someone
w
ork
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works
is working
has worked
i
n
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at
on
a construction site, wearing s
uit
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suits
to
work
 is definitely not appropriate, as they usually limit body movement, it could make a worker less p
erformant,
a dramatic or musical entertainment
performance
 and accident a
re
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is
more likely to happen due to improper dressing.
H
owever for
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However, for
some occupation,
dress
 smartly is helpful as formal dressing is helpful to maintain p
rofessional image.
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a professional image
the professional image
 Imagine if a lawyer o
n
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in
a court wearing s
portwears
a person who backs a politician or a team etc.
supporters
sportswear
against another lawyer with proper suits, most people with consider the one
dress
 casually is not professional enough, and the judge will have b
ad impression
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a bad impression
to the one whom doesn't properly. To conclude, quality of
work
 should always superior than how employee
dress
, unless the clothing is having a negative impact t
o
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on
their
work
, or preventing them to perform their
job
 function properly.

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