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Many people think that the government should spend more money on providing faster and cheaper means of public transport.some others think that there are important factors to take in consideration like (fuel,cost and environment) Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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IT is considered by some that governments spending should be increased in faster and less expensive means of
transport
 while it is argued by some that more investment made by
government
 in fuel cost and environment.
This
 essay will discuss the both views about
government
 spending. Large parts of the
government
's funding
should be spend
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should spend
 on public
transit which
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transit, which
 are speedy and cost effective means.Now a day, people have no more time to spend on travelling while fast vehicle makes their journey more time consuming.If more transit services will be
providing
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provided
 by supreme
authority
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authority, then
then
 people will avoid the use of their own vehicle.So that
,
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,
more traffic problem can be overcome,
for example
,
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,
in Delhi
government
 metro development for people than their own personal vehicles. The other hand
,
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,
some people
are commanly believed
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is commonly believed
are commonly believed
 that
government
 should consider other factors
also
 like spending on fuel, environment and cost. A person
spend
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spends
 main parts of their income on gas service and for buying
product
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the product
a product
products
. Governments less awareness towards cleaning the city make the people sick. If
government
Suggestion
the government
 will spend large part of their budget on these
emenities
things that make you comfortable and at ease
amenities
.So that, people could save their money as well as nature. In conclusion
,
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,
there is conflict between different type of people about in which
aspects whether
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aspects, whether
government
 spending should be more on
transport
 or in other factors of consideration.
However in
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However, in
 my opinion when legislative power makes the budget
,
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,
then
major part
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a major part
 of their budget should be made for development of speedy means of
transport
.If
government
 able to
achieve the
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achieve, the
 more development in
transport
then
 the major problem of traffic and pollution caused by it can be resolved.

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