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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend while others argue that it leading to negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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the masses
 so asserts that the use of computer in education industry has improved step by step
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believes
 that it has its negative impact.
However
, in my prospective,
this
 statement needs
further
 scrutinising before forming any view.
First
 and foremost, computers have an access in winding the spectrum of knowledge of students. Computers are an effective technology which can increase the productivity of pupils.
However
, information can easily
accessible
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access
 on computer's search engine like Google.
This
 suggests that observers do not have to struggle in libraries to locate possible information. For
this
 reason it is evident that computers have their vital role to enhance their way of learning. With regards its ill effects, the enhancement of utilisation of computer could hamper the
students
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students'
student
student's
 performance. Computers which are widely acceptable for study purpose are not accessible to students everywhere so that it would be difficult for students to cope up with the lessons learnt in the school. Eventually the learner will not be able to score appropriate marks
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on
 their exam.
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All
 in all
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this
 reason depicts that the use of computers may put pupils
in delicate
in violation of good taste even verging on the indecent
indelicate
. In conclusion, contributing of computers in education has some of its downfalls, but because of its effectiveness it can be said that these technological gadgets have their positive effects on student's learning ability.
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