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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does Tourism bring more advantages and disadvantages to a country ?

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I fully consent that
tourism
 for any
country
 is advantageous.
Tourism
 can be described in a way that influx of people to other countries for viewing the beauty and speciality of destination countries. Enthralled with the iconic view, gratified thoroughly in engrossing themselves in
such beautiful location
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such a beautiful location
, it provides an opportunity
to
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for
tourist
 to grasp the culture and imbibed the positivity pervaded in the nature. Countries are investing heavily to develop
tourist
 hotspot and building infrastructure to be hotbed
for
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of
tourist
 and making eye catching spot for attracting them. Many countries
major
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majored
are majoring
 revenue coming up from
tourism
dept
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Dept
dept.
, adopting
plan
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plans
 to create
heavenly environment
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a heavenly environment
 is the most important aspects the
region
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regional
 head. Beholding beauties and soothing nature in any
countries apparently
Accept comma addition
countries, apparently
 entice
tourist
 to reserve the spot. Countries must keep
an
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a
 birds eye view on security of
tourist
 as mayhem, or untoward incident with them would be malicious and detrimental for
next visit
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the next visit
 of that
tourist
instead
 would fan out the information to other colleagues do not plan to visit the
country
 where they faced humiliation and felt unsecured. Countries having historical places are being selected by
tourist
 in
huge number
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huge numbers
a huge number
 than countries where these spots are missing. Its modern era people earning has manifold so much that they can afford to trip countries for holidays and get rid of materialistic life temporarily and leading king size life.
Tourism
 generates the revenue of the
country
 and share in
economy
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the economy
 is significant and assisting in
stabilize
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stabilizing
 the economy even people of native
country
 lively hood depends upon the service and support which they provides to
tourist
. Disadvantages of
tourism
 is there like its disturbs the harmony of any
country
 if miscreants / drug peddler enters into
country
 having past background awash with boisterousness ,obviously he would malign the sacrosanct environment of that
country
 by indulging in illicit activities and would persuade gullible locals to join him for earning quick money so locals arbitrarily will have hand in glove in crime for the sake of money,
secondly
 disease carriage, generally conflagration of deadly disease in any countries are spread by foreigners which proves deadly and full of menace herein medical check up procedure must be followed up sincerely. So at
last
tourism
 engulfing more advantages than disadvantages because of pervasive reasons and must be promoted.
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