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Some people believe that the the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs . Other believe that there are much wider benefits of university education for both individual and society . Discuss both views and give your opinion .

#people #aim #university #education #graduates #jobs #society
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There is no gainsaying
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the fact
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 plays virtual role in
everyone
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everyone's
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 they can get better jobs with the help of
university
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education
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 while
rest
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the rest
 of the people
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say
 that there are several benefits to people and society of
university
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education
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 My opinion related to given statement would be hashed out in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand
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 there are multifarious reasons why some people think that
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university
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a university education
education
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 is to help get good jobs
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 One of the most plausible reasons is
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 when they get
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education
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an education
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university
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university, then
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 some companies select the students during their study
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 That higher those students who are very intelligent
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 In
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 way they can get better jobs and they can get good salary as well as if students
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want
 to complete their
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study, then
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 that can help by giving fees to students
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 they will not have to face problems. Apart from it
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 That can get
degree
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a degree
 from
university
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 because it is proof of qualifications so
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 companies give jobs to people on the basis of degree
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 They can easily get better jobs.
On the other hand
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 there are several benefits to people and society of
university
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education
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First
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 and foremost is
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 if they have
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education
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education, then
then
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 they can give free
education
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 to people who
donot
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do not
 have enough money for getting
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education
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educated
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 Due to
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 after getting
knowledge
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the knowledge
 they can do good work and earn money
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Moreover
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 they can aware
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of
 people about
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 and
also
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 they can ask them the importance of
education
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 which is very beneficial for them. In conclusion
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 having mulled over the aforementioned information
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 it is crystal clear that
although
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university
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education
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 is to help get better jobs
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 it seems to me that it is
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 very beneficial for individual and society
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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