Some people think that the governments should give financial support to artists, musicians and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people argue that there should be financial assistance required for the artists, musicians and poets by the government. While others feel its redundant. Let us discuss about these two arguments in detail in the following paragraphs. As a matter of fact, actors,
music performers
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music, performers
and
lyrists
are creative people and they are providing entertainment to the public with their performance. So
its
it is
it's
necessary to encourage these kind of human beings.
In addition
to
this
, art shows the true culture of the country and through artists only one would know the greatness of the
nation
.
For instance
, nations with rich culture and performers have produced more intellectuals as compared to other countries. So,
its
it is
it's
obvious by supporting artists monetary
nation
would be
thrived
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thriving
. On the flip side, there is another argument that
financal
involving financial matters
financial
support to performers could lead to
economic downfall
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the economic downfall
of the country.
For example
,
France which
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France, which
has a deep
culture
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cultural
and
inclination
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an inclination
towards the artists, has been economically drained because of 20% of the
nation
's income gone to the performers pockets.
However
,
this
is not the only parameter to judge. By taking all the scenarios into consideration, we would say that there must be a balance of giving support to the artists.
Otherwise
, it leads to the monetary distress and creates havoc in the economy of the
nation
. In my view,
althogh
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
performs should be respected, but not at the cost of
.
Accept space
.
Government should encourage artists by creating wealth through performances and distribute the money to the performers so that it could be a win-win situation.
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Example:

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