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Some people think that the governments should give financial support to artists, musicians and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that there should be financial assistance required for the artists, musicians and poets by the government. While others feel its redundant. Let us discuss about these two arguments in detail in the following paragraphs. As a matter of fact, actors,
music performers
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music, performers
 and
lyrists
 are creative people and they are providing entertainment to the public with their performance. So
its
it is
it's
 necessary to encourage these kind of human beings.
In addition
 to
this
, art shows the true culture of the country and through artists only one would know the greatness of the
nation
.
For instance
, nations with rich culture and performers have produced more intellectuals as compared to other countries. So,
its
it is
it's
 obvious by supporting artists monetary
nation
 would be
thrived
Suggestion
thriving
. On the flip side, there is another argument that
financal
involving financial matters
financial
 support to performers could lead to
economic downfall
Suggestion
the economic downfall
 of the country.
For example
,
France which
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France, which
 has a deep
culture
Suggestion
cultural
 and
inclination
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an inclination
 towards the artists, has been economically drained because of 20% of the
nation
's income gone to the performers pockets.
However
,
this
 is not the only parameter to judge. By taking all the scenarios into consideration, we would say that there must be a balance of giving support to the artists.
Otherwise
, it leads to the monetary distress and creates havoc in the economy of the
nation
. In my view,
althogh
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
 performs should be respected, but not at the cost of
.
Accept space
.
 Government should encourage artists by creating wealth through performances and distribute the money to the performers so that it could be a win-win situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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