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The growth of Online shopping will one day lead to all the shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
In recent times preference for Shopping Online has increased exponentially.
As a
result some
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result, some
 people believe that in the not so distant future
,
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,
 physical shops in towns and cities would have to close down. In my opinion, I agree that
this
 would definitely happen as recent consumer behaviour trends already point out. One major reason brick and mortar shops may soon become a thing of the past is the changes in human
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. People today are generally time poor. We live in a digital age, a world of heavy traffic and longer working hours and as
such
 most people do not relish the idea of driving down to
shopping malls
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the shopping malls
 and spending hours going from store to store.
For instance
, a study carried out by the New York Times in 2018 showed that the number of people who shop exclusively online increased by 85% in the
last
 decade. What
this
 means is that physical stores are getting less traffic as their potential clients have shifted to the more convenient option of buying online. Another thing to consider is that new entrants into retail business are choosing to run their stores online as against opening physical stores. They choose
this
 route because it reduces
entry cost
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the entry cost
 considering they could run a profitable business venture right from their living room.
This
 assertion is supported by recent studies by research organisations which have shown that with the advent of
big
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the biggest
 social media sites like Instagram and Facebook, a lot of businesses now run their stores solely on these sites.
In other words
 existing stores are dwindling in number and
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 ones are
also
 not springing up as everyone is doing their business on the internet. In conclusion, going by the recent trend in consumer shopping preferences
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,
 it is certain that one day soon all physical shops in urban areas will be forced to move to online channels and ultimately close their doors as keeping the shops open would no longer be a sensible thing to do.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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