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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Today
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 the way of living of people
have been changed
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has been changed
 due to
advancement
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the advancement
 and innovation
of
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in
 technology and
development
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the development
 of
new type
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new types
a new type
 of
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
 for leisure
activitires
any specific behavior
activities
.
Shooping
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Shopping
centers
a period of 100 years
centuries
 has been one of
such
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influencial
having or exercising influence or power
influential
place
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 for the
youth
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today
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.Everyone wants to enjoy new activities and products in the
market but
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market, but
 the way they are used can have impacts on the daily activities and growth of
youth
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 and society
today
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. Shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
Centers
 are well designed and maintained
place
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 for
fulfulling
put in effect
fulfilling
relaxual
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 needs and leisure
time
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 of
youth
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today
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.They are provided with varieties of modern shops and trendy bars where
youth
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 as well as other people can have a great
time
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.
Youth
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today
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 are brain-drained towards new trends seen in the social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
.So
,
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,
to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their
needs they
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needs, they
 try to visit
such
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centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 where they can get stylish and trendy clothes. Shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
Centers
 are hell like a combo package for all the entertaining things like cinema
,
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,
cafe and bar
,
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,
game stations and so on.
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,
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,
its
it is
it's
 a great
place
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 to have some fun in the weekend or during our leisure
time
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. But making a casual pattern to visit shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 occasionally can have a negative
influence especially
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influence, especially
 to the
youth
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 and
untimately
as the end result of a succession or process
ultimately
 to the society as well.
For example
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,
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,
 most of the teenage
today
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 bunk their colleges and schools to have a fun
activities
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activity
 in the shopping malls.
This
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 can have a serious impact
in
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on
 their growth and career development for the future.
Youth
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find
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finds
 the
place
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 awesome and start making a habit of going there which will lead to the loss of money and
time
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 as well.
Therefore
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,
its
it is
it's
 a great responsibility of the parents and relative to guide their children regarding
such
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 activities.Government should put some age restriction
to
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on
 the level of activities that are conducted in the shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
.
Instead
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 of only having fun and recreational activities
concered
feeling or showing worry or solicitude
concerned
 authority should try to develop career development stalls inside the mall which will surely help to reduce the negative impact on our
youth
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today
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.
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