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Some people think if students are afraid of the teacher it is better. Other say that having a friendly relationship is better. Discuss both points and give your opinion.

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It is thought by some that it is important when students get scared of their teachers
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 while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 argue that friendship among them is the most essential thing.In my opinion, I believe that when there is a good connection that ties teachers with their students
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 learning becomes easier. On the one hand, many think that students should be afraid of their
teacher
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 in
this
 way
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 they could learn better.
In other words
, if teachers are rude
with
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to
 students
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 they will
automatically improve in
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automatically improve
 their studies due to the fact that they know if they do not reach their goals the teachers may get angry and punish them roughly.As a clear
exemple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, when I was in sixth grade, there was a
teacher
 who never smiled and was demanding.
Therefore
, my classmates and I always made efforts to be on time every day and we made sure we memorised our lessons and did our homework in order to please the
teacher
.
As a result
 of being afraid
by
Suggestion
of
 the
teacher
 we all did our best.
On the other hand
, it is better when students and teachers become friends, according to some others.As a matter of fact, when in a
classroom there
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classroom, there
 is
friendship
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a friendship
 between the one who teaches and the others who learn there is mutual benefits
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Consequently
, students are more likely to develop their skills and teachers can learn from them.
Furthermore
, students are able to become more creative since they learn in an environment of peace
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 In conclusion, being in a safe place where students and teachers can share ideas as though they were friends is way better than being in one where the teachers treat their students as slaves and block their capacity of thinking clearly.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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