For some people, consumer goods have become the most important thing in life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In modern society, a large number of
person
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people
persons
consider consumer goods as the principal thing in life.In my opinion, I believe that the benefits do not outweigh the drawbacks.
Firstly
, life is becoming more materialistic due to the fact that many people spend
numerous amount
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numerous amounts
the numerous amount
a numerous amount
of
money
in buying leisure and luxury products,
this
trend lead to the
unecessary
not necessary
unnecessary
necessary
waste of income.
In other words
, to satisfy their desire, some people
buy
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buys
things sometimes
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things, sometimes
they do not even need
,
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,
while they could spend it on more important things
,
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,
namely, health and education.
As a result
of
this
, general public experience many
difficulty
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difficulties
.
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.
For instance
, my friend bought an
Iphone
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iPhone
IPhone
8 lately
,
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,
yersterday
the day immediately before today
yesterday
she had an
appointement
the act of putting a person into a non-elective position
appointment
with his doctor, she did not have enough
money
to pay the fair.
Secondly
, spending
money
uneffectively
in an effective manner
effectively
can be a mean of stress
,
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,
anxiety and much more.When a person
develop
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develops
the habit of putting materials
first
,
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,
they often
barrow
get temporarily
borrow
money
when they lack, which means they turn into huge debt and they become depressed.Another point to consider is,
family
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families
a family
can fall into trouble and even break up owing to certain facts.
For example
, we often hear family that
get
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gets
divorced because the wife is buying all and nothing
,
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,
thus
, the husband can feel working in vain and decide to get rid of his partner. In conclusion, even when it is trendy to invest in products
,
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,
it is risky because the disadvantages are far
uger
displeasing to the senses
uglier
than the
disadventages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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