Some people say that it is alright to use animals for our benefit; others say it is not good to exploit them. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Animals have been the best friends of human since Stone Age. While some of us believe that they are one of the driving force for the progress made by humans today, others argue that they are being abused by us.
This
essay will discuss the pros and cons of deploying animals in different works by humans in forthcoming paragraphs. Animals have proved to be a source of supplies for a myriad of human activities. One of them is the dairy industry. Dairy products
such
as milk, cheese, curd and buttermilk are all an imperative sources of protein and carbohydrate. Owing to the exponential growth of human population, the need of food has
also
increased. Had we not used animals for our food needs, nearly 40% of the population could have been facing malnutrition. A study conducted in California in 2017 uncovered the fact that nearly 55% of our dietary supplements consists of dairy products.
Furthermore
, plenty of medicinal products are manufactured with the help of substances extracted from animals.
As a
result once
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result, once
incurable diseases are now being easily cured and thousands of lives being saved.
For instance
cod liver oil is being used in hundreds of medical syrups available in the market today.
Nevertheless
, using animals for our benefits is not devoid of its share of criticism. The monstrosity shown by humans for satisfying their materialistic needs
have resulted
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has resulted
into
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in
extinction
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the extinction
of several species of animals. Some animals have special features or body parts, the possession of which is seen as a status symbol by humans.
Hence
,
such
animals are being hunted blindly and have now reached on a verge of extinction. An overwhelming evidence of
this
, is the single surviving double tusk rhino on the earth. It is only one of its kind and
hence
seemingly about to be extinct. To conclude, I would say that
although
we all are aware about
importance
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the importance
that the existence of each species of animals has in our food chain and ecosystem, little do we care when it comes to sacrificing our luxuries.
Therefore in
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Therefore, in
my opinion animals can definitely be used for our
benefits but
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benefit, but
benefit but
it should not result in exploitation and while using them for
such
purposes we
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purposes, we
should
also
equally care about their habitat and personal space to avoid adverse repercussions of it.
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