All parents want the best opportunity for their children. There are some people who think schools should teach children skills but others think having a huge range of subjects is better for a child's future. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

Obviously parents often want to think bright future for their children.One
can not
can not
cannot
deny from that fact that schools
should be teach
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should teach
children best
skills while
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skills, while
many
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
feel that having more subjects to the teenager beneficial for their foreseeable future.I believe that schools
should be teach
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should teach
skills to the youngsters
are the
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are, the
more reliable for their coming life rather than additional subject. On the one hand
,
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,
Most schools teach
differnt kind
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different kinds
different kind
a different kind
of skills on the daily basis to improve the
mentality
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mental
approach and thinking quality
to
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of
the children
throughtout
all the way through
throughout
many games like puzzle games.
such
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Such
games boost up the cells of the brain and mind approach
,
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,
for instance
, arrange lots of other knowledgeable events to increase the knowledge.
In other words
, whoever there are many other activities,
for example
quiz
competetions
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
competitions
with others schools. On the other hands
,
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,
lots of subjects
also
like sciences, geography and
mathametic
a science (or group of related sciences) dealing with the logic of quantity and shape and arrangement
mathematics
are essential for their foreseeable future along with scientific knowledge and boost up their career.
Finally
,
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,
in my opinion
,
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,
Schools have a
resposible
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responsibility
responsible
to teach essential
skilss
an ability that has been acquired by training
skills
to the teenagers rather than their parents because
mostly
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most
parents have not best skills to teach in proper manner to their
childerns
even they have no ideas that what are the essential skills for our babies. In Conclusion
,
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,
Making a
best
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better
good
nation its
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nation, its
our duty to teach
essenatail
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
skills, so our children competitive in their department not only compete in our country but
also
worldwide competitions.

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