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You live in a house near a park. Recently, a lot of teenagers have been meeting in the park at night. They are very noisy. Write an email to the local government in about 250 words. Your email should do the following things: • Provide information about where you live. • Explain the problem and how it affects your life. • Suggest a way to solve the problem.

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I'm writing to you, in order to express my concerns and make you aware, on series of disturbing incidents that took place at the night
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 in the Edmonton
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park
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. My house is located adjoining the
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park
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 and I've been residing here for
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 10 years. Totaling, 25 - 30 families residing in the
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's vicinity. Recently, we have been disturbed by a group of teenagers who are arriving to the
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 after sunset and partying till dawn in the
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park
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. They are using sound equipment which amplify the music to a loud noise and it is disturbing to our lifestyle, especially at night
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 when we sleep. Most of our community members work in the
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, in day jobs and they certainly need adequate rest at the night
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. Not to mention the children who are studying at late after school, who
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 require pin drop silence for better concentration. If I may suggest, having
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 entry
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 and a closing
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 may resolve
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 issue, and if the
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 council could consider of appointing designated officer for the
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, it may certainly reduce the number of
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 incidents. I trust that you would look at
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 issue at your earliest possible and expects a speedy solution.
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